Sunday, 13 April 2014

Success criteria for camp writting

Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader)

  • use a range of verbs

  • use a variety of adverbs

Language features (phrases that help paint a picture)

  • select 2 - 3 similes

  • select 2 - 3 metaphors or personification

  • choose onomatopoeia to show sounds (crash!)

  • select words that start with the same sound (alliteration)


  • use short sentences to create suspense


  • use 3 - 5 paragraphs.

I think I need a heap more practice with language features all of them aspecialy personification .i did really well at using expression


Thursday, 10 April 2014

Tuesday, 8 April 2014


Time has come. As I climb up the ladders I'm saying to my self  how dose she do this for a job climbing up the ladders all day.                                                                                                                                                                                                                     
 As I got to the top ants said have a seat. as she lets someone climb down and then sore a hand poke up from the side wait there.    she said as she hive fives a hand. and she asked me what rope I want to you,s  I said hmmm she pushed me to do the black rope it was the best

day 2 of writting 

It was the best because you 
 can  control your speed. she said  just stand on the other side of the bar i said  now.  she said yes okay she said  I'll clip you. on click now she said remember this holds an elephant. she told me don't bounce on the rubber ok. I started walking down . and then I started bouncing because I was off the rubber. then I Heard the  wall saying STOP KICKING ME i said shhh I'm trying  to climb down a wall here. as I hit the ground the first thing I said was it was simple. jokes it's pretty scary and tall .after me was Sophie mostly everyone in my group cheered Sophie
 on including me As my hands slowly stop shaking .

The End   

Monday, 7 April 2014

Group presentation

Camp Presentation

WALT: present 
Success Criteria:
Know your stuff 
Loud clear voice
Share the main points
Make eye contact
Make sure every member participates


Task: Find out about air rifle's,

Reflection: I think I could talk louder